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GA Review[ಬದಲಾಯಿಸಿ]

ಟೆಂಪ್ಲೇಟು:Al

Reviewer: JDC808 (talk · contribs) 17:50, 11 March 2015 (UTC)


Before I start my reviews, I always go through and copy-edit first.

Lead

  • The third "paragraph" is only one sentence. Can you expand this by at least a couple more sentences?

Appearances

-In video games

  • The fourth paragraph, I don't see the necessity of needing to mention she was in trailers and concept art, but it's nothing major. If this was the development or marketing section for StarCaft II, I could see its usage, but like I said, it's nothing major.
  • "In StarCraft II, Kerrigan begins anew her attack on the Terran Dominion colonies." What? Maybe I'm having a brain fart, but that doesn't sound right.
  • When does she start proclaiming herself as the "Queen of Blades"? That should be mentioned sometime before the Heart of Swarm paragraph. --JDC808 17:50, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Reception

  • Something you might want to add: Tricia Helfer won "Best Performance by a Human Female" at the 2010 Spike Video Game Awards for her role as Sarah Kerrigan in StarCraft II: Wings of Liberty.

References

  • REF #2 and #5 which are instruction manual refs, you can cite those the same way you do the other books.
  • Looking over the sources, you cite the work, but not the publisher (for example, REF #45, Game Informer is the work, GameStop would be its publisher).

That's all I have. --JDC808 19:36, 11 March 2015 (UTC)